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[livejournal.com profile] destina issued a Jack/Daniel hotel sex challenge a while back, and as much as I tried to resist the idea, I just couldn't help myself. Thing was, I didn't really have any good ideas for one, just sex, but I wrote it anyway. It ain't much, but you know how it is, writing it is the only way to exorcise the demon. It's unbeta'd, and knee-deep in cliches. With a handful of run-on sentences tossed in for good measure. Read at your own risk.

BTW, I'm sure some of you will notice the bits inspired by [livejournal.com profile] troyswann's recent adventure.



Rated Five Stars

Jack opened the door before Daniel even finished knocking. "Daniel," Jack said, backing away, his eyes wary. "You're here. Very prompt of you." He moved further than was actually necessary to let Daniel in, and kept moving.

As if Daniel hadn't been ready and waiting for this moment all day--or for years, maybe.

It was a typical hotel room, pale walls, dark furniture, with bland, inoffensive art over a bed that was roughly the size of a football field. "Nice," Daniel commented with some surprise. He wondered how much a bed like that would cost, and if he could fit one into his little house.

Jack was standing at the window. His fingers tugged at the drapes, even though they were already closed up tight, allowing only a thin sliver of sunlight into the room. "Yeah, well," he murmured, without looking up.

Daniel heart sank as he watched Jack fiddle with the heavy cloth. After everything they went through the night before--the fierce kissing, the talking, with more talking, and the arguing, resulting finally in this carefully arranged rendezvous--Jack was having second thoughts.

"Yup," Daniel said. "That bed alone is bigger than some apartments I've lived in."

Jack's eyes flicked over to the king-sized bed, covered with a resplendent green and gold bedspread, piled high with pillows. He regarded it as if it were alive, as if it were liable to attack at any time. "It's a bed, all right."

"Big. Plenty of room." Daniel slid his hands into his pockets and nudged it with his knee. The bedcover had an intricate pattern, shiny fabric with green leaves twined around full, golden flowers. Roses, maybe?

The silence stretched between them, broken only by the drone of the air conditioning unit. Daniel glanced over to see Jack scuffing the pale rug with his toe. He was still wearing his shoes. "I have to admit," Daniel finally said, "I expected someplace a little more seedy--I mean, isn't that more appropriate for an assignation? Sagging bed, lumpy pillows, blinking neon lights--you know, seedy."

"Seedy hurts my back," Jack admitted. "And there's no room service. But if you want seedy, we can go somewhere else--"

"No, no, no, this is fine, this is great, as a matter of fact. Room service. That's good." Daniel was babbling, and he knew it. The situation felt awkward, if not downright wrong. For one thing, Jack was still all the way on the other side of the room studying the curtains. Daniel was pretty sure they needed to at least be on the same side of the room to have sex.

He understood that Jack was scared. Hell, he was too. But they could be scared together, couldn't they? Preferably while naked, in a very large bed. Like that one, right there in the room with them. Because the simple truth was that he wanted, no he needed Jack--fidgety Jack with his silly lopsided smile, Jack so tense and nervous as he tried to keep his distance. Daniel had to get close to him again, feel his warm, wiry body against his, needed to let go the pretense of casual affection and love Jack with all his heart and body and soul and anything else he could get his hands on. And after the kissing and the hugging and touching last night, he knew Jack was just as desperate.

He just needed a little push.

"Well, I'm going to get started," Daniel announced as he pulled the covers off the bed. "Feel free to join in at any time. This whole sex thing is usually a lot more fun with two people." He lifted his tee-shirt off over his head, wondering if Jack really was going to freak out and leave, leave him standing alone in a non-seedy hotel room, shirtless and utterly frustrated.

Jack didn't leave.

Before Daniel even finished pulling off his shirt Jack was there, thank god, right behind him. Jack had crossed the great divide to wind an arm around Daniel's waist and press his lips to Daniel's shoulder. Daniel leaned against him, sighing in relief. Jack had lost his shirt along the way, and that was nice, very nice what with the sensation of warm skin and chest hair rubbing against his bare back. Jack's rough hand was splayed out on his stomach, holding him steady while warm lips drifted across his shoulder to his neck. Daniel's cock grew even harder, and he was sure he was going to explode, that he was going to come right there in his pants.

"This is nuts, you know that," Jack told him, his breath tickling Daniel's ear.

"Yeah, well, we pretty much worked that out last night." Daniel put his hand over Jack's.

"Feels like I'm jumping out of a plane without a parachute."

"But look," Daniel said, "There's big soft bed to land on."

"But Daniel, I--we--"

"Enough with the talking." Daniel turned to face Jack, his hands on Jack's shoulders. "Listen--we're gay. We love each other. It's scary as hell but we've got to just get naked and deal with it."

Jack stared at him in surprise. When he opened his mouth to speak yet again Daniel quickly raised his hand. "Ah!" Daniel said sharply, pointing his finger at Jack's mouth. "End of discussion. Naked. Now."

Jack closed his mouth. He watched for a moment as Daniel continued undressing. Then to Daniel's delight did the same himself, stepping awkwardly out of his jeans, almost losing his balance while pulling off his socks. When he was done he presented himself with arms outstretched, mouth shut tight, and his lips in a firm, straight line. But he couldn't hide the laughter in his eyes.

"You're so naked," Daniel said, grinning stupidly. It was a silly thing to say, but Jack was beautifully naked, so tall, long skinny legs and narrow hips, hard, hairy chest. Daniel loved all the hair, swirling around dark nipples, trailing down his stomach, leading to a wild bush of pubic hair and a boldly jutting cock. "And there's that," he added, pointing to Jack's cock.

Jack nodded proudly.

"I love you."

Jack placed his hands on his hips and frowned.

"All of you," Daniel added, realizing he had been staring at Jack's cock when he spoke. His eyes flicked back down. "But especially that part of you."

The next thing Daniel knew he was on the bed, Jack on top of him, his weight pushing him down into the mattress. Mouth to mouth, chest to chest, belly to belly. Ravenous kisses, as if Jack wanted to eat him alive and Daniel was more than happy to let him. He spread his legs and pushed his cock against Jack's hip and it was good, so good that he dug his heels into the mattress and shoved hard, moaning open-mouthed against Jack's cheek.

Jack reached underneath and grabbed Daniel's ass, fingers digging in, holding tight as he gave an answering thrust of his hips, his cock sliding against Daniel's stomach and Daniel decided that was all he needed. The grunting and sliding and thrusting was enough, the friction, amazing. They could save the fancy stuff for later. Mindlessly rubbing his entire body against Jack's was definitely the way to go. It seemed fine with Jack, too. Because Jack was holding onto him as if he might fall to earth if he let go, his hips jerking rapidly, breath fast and harsh in Daniel's ear. Push, shove, and clutch, they had a rhythm going and Jack's skin was slick and sweaty with the effort. Jack was on him, all around him, his taste on Daniel's tongue, the feel of his skin, the smell of his sweat, the small noises he was making, deep in his throat. The sounds grew louder, his body convulsing and moving out of synch. Jack was about to come, and wasn't that just an amazing thing. He wrapped his arms around Jack's body, hugging him tightly, because he loved Jack so much, because after so many years, Jack was willing to make this jump with him.

"Daniel--" Jack said, his voice low and rough. "Daniel--oh fuck--" He stiffened and came, Daniel's stomach growing warm and slippery with his come, and that was even more exciting and kind of nasty, too, Jack's come all over him, his hot skin getting even hotter as their bodies slid together. Then all thoughts vanished as he came, too, with a sharp burst of pleasure, and it really was like falling, blood singing in his ears like the roar of the wind, so dizzying but Jack was there, holding him and kissing him.

They came to rest on the on the huge bed, sticky and wet, Daniel feeling as though his heart was overflowing with relief and joy and love. "Okay," he finally said, when he could talk again. "That wasn't so scary, was it?"

Jack raised his head from Daniel's chest with a questioning look.

Daniel made a show of thinking it over. "All right, you may talk now. But only briefly."

Jack sat up, solemnly wiping his stomach with the edge of the sheet, then folding his hands on his lap. It was his making-an-announcement-mode, Daniel knew, and he looked so god damned cute doing it all naked and ruffled that Daniel wanted to pull him down and kiss him senseless. But he generously let Jack speak.

"Okay," Jack said, with a curt nod. "A: Yes, that was scary, terrifying as a matter of fact; B: Why'd we wait so damn long to do it; and C: Can we do it again? Right now?"

Daniel opened his mouth, but Jack placed a hand over his lips. "Oh wait, one more. D: I love you, too."

Daniel licked his fingers.

Jack smiled. "That's all the answer I need."


Date: 2004-08-28 03:12 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] epeeblade
Aw! Perfect, I could totally hear Daniel in this. Very cute...

Date: 2004-08-28 03:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Wow, that was quick! Thank you, epee! You're so sweet. I wasn't real happy with this but had to post it or else I'd never stop screwing with it. So I was feeling a little embarrassed about it.

And I waved to Seaside as we drove past on the Parkway, did you see me? *g*

Date: 2004-08-28 03:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenlev.livejournal.com
er....so, back from vacation eh? *veg*

hats off to this line especially: ""All right, you may talk now. But only briefly."" as usual, you write beautifully and with great wit. ;)

Date: 2004-08-28 03:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh, yum, nice icon! That's the Daniel who keeps Jack in line.

Thank you for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed this. I do like when Daniel bosses Jack around. As does Jack.

Date: 2004-08-28 04:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenlev.livejournal.com
the icon is a gift from the generous and amazing salieri. she who makes icon with a quality of light that a renaissance painter would envy.

daniel absolutely knows what jack wants anyway. *G*

Date: 2004-08-28 04:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] destina.livejournal.com
*happy grin* I'm so glad you couldn't resist. *g*

"Listen--we're gay. We love each other. It's scary as hell but we've got to just get naked and deal with it."

and

"I love you."

Jack placed his hands on his hips and frowned.

"All of you," Daniel added, realizing he had been staring at Jack's cock when he spoke.


LOL!! Embrace the cliches! Whee! *g* This was hot and funny and ever so much fun. Thank you for writing it. :D

Date: 2004-08-28 04:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, sweetie. You are so nice! But I guess cliche-fic can be kind of fun. Shameless cliche-fic!

I did try and keep them quiet, just for you. *g* Didn't want too much talking. But I couldn't keep Daniel from being so darn bossy about it.

Date: 2004-08-28 04:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ex-danvers514.livejournal.com
"I love you."

Jack placed his hands on his hips and frowned.

"All of you," Daniel added, realizing he had been staring at Jack's cock when he spoke. His eyes flicked back down. "But especially that part of you."


Daniel! You whore! Yay whore!Daniel! Cool sniplet ;-)

Date: 2004-08-29 05:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
He's such a dirty boy. Just the way Jack likes him.

Thank you!

Date: 2004-08-28 04:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] frahulettaes.livejournal.com
so many things to love.
mostly, what great smut!
god I love your j/d.
kisses your toes.
;)

Date: 2004-08-29 05:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::giggles, because toes are ticklish::

Glad you enjoyed, sweetie!

Date: 2004-08-28 04:34 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] nicci-mac.livejournal.com
"I love you."

Jack placed his hands on his hips and frowned.

"All of you," Daniel added, realizing he had been staring at Jack's cock when he spoke. His eyes flicked back down. "But especially that part of you."


Bwahaha - loved that line! Made me smile, and God how I needed to smile. Thanks!

Date: 2004-08-29 05:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Glad I could help out, ma'am!

Thank you!

Date: 2004-08-28 06:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skater-g8r.livejournal.com
oh!...wow..OMG!!!! that was brilliant 8-)
cuteness and hotness and rather funny 8-DDD they are jsut so adorable like that aren't they *bg*

you do them so well ::blush:: *g*

Date: 2004-08-30 06:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Sweetie! Thank you! It was silly, I think, but I just like to play with bossy Daniel. *g*

Ha! Adorable hotness

Date: 2004-08-28 06:29 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] khellekson.livejournal.com
Oh, what great details here. I love that it isn't seedy. I love that they go really, really fast. I love that they love. I love that they had to do an assignation, after an initial (behind-the-scenes) making out.

Mmmm.

Five stars.

Re: Ha! Adorable hotness

Date: 2004-08-30 06:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Aw, go on now, it was goofy, but I'm tickled that you liked it. Thank you! And it was very non-seedy, because Jack thinks that Daniel deserves only the best, but he's too embarrassed to admit it.

I think the room might have come with one of those big whirlpool bath thingies, too. *g*

Date: 2004-08-28 07:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com
Ah, smut. Smut good.

And Daniel saying I love you to Jack's dick? Priceless.

Date: 2004-08-30 06:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Mmmm, smut always good. Like your smut ficlet, which was very, very good, especially because it contained one of my bulletproof kinks, with Jack kneeling over Daniel like that at the end. Mmmmm. Good stuff.

Because Daniel really does love Jack's dick. ;-)

Date: 2004-08-30 06:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com

Because Daniel really does love Jack's dick

Yes, yes he does.

I'm glad you liked the story. It's an odd piece, I know, but it wouldn't let me go until I'd written it.

Speaking of smut, I wrote rimming last night. It seems there are other parts of Jack Daniel loves besides his dick. /g/

Date: 2004-08-30 05:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Okay, now you've mentioned my other bullet-proof kink. Are you reading my mind???

Date: 2004-08-30 06:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com
I might be.

Do you want to read it? The whole fic is very much a WIP, but that scene is done. I'd be happy to send it if you want a kink fix. /g/

Date: 2004-08-31 06:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Yes please! *g*

Date: 2004-08-28 07:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] msbeata.livejournal.com
Whoo hoo!

Date: 2004-08-30 05:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Right back atcha!

Date: 2004-08-28 07:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gypsy86.livejournal.com
hugs thegrrrl and her fic tightly

Yay! You're back! And you brought smut! :) I loved Daniel going "Ah!" and shutting Jack up, the little role reversal. And Daniel being the one who realizes he has to get this show on the road to get Jack over his paralysis. Plus it was sweet but not schmoopy.

::squeezes tight::

Date: 2004-08-30 05:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Yes, you know right where Daniel learned that little move! I'll bet they have entire non-conversations that way. *g*

And thank you, I'm glad you liked, it was silly fluff and maybe really a bit schmoopy but hey, hotel sex!

Date: 2004-08-28 08:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wickdzoot.livejournal.com
I nubs you so.

They're such guys, that's what I love.

Like this:



"You're so naked," Daniel said, grinning stupidly.

Jack nodded proudly.

"I love you."

Jack placed his hands on his hips and frowned.

"All of you," Daniel added, realizing he had been staring at Jack's cock when he spoke. His eyes flicked back down. "But especially that part of you."

And this is just so Daniel.

"Well, I'm going to get started," Daniel announced as he pulled the covers off the bed. "Feel free to join in at any time. This whole sex thing is usually a lot more fun with two people."

Date: 2004-08-30 05:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Yes, I think Daniel had gotten tired of that one-person sex thing. *g* He wasn't about to let Jack talk himself out of it.

Glad you liked!

Date: 2004-08-28 08:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mz-bstone.livejournal.com
mmmmmmmmmm

finger-licking good.

B

Date: 2004-08-31 06:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! Glad you liked it.

Date: 2004-08-29 02:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] agentotter.livejournal.com
Whooooooooooooooo, HOT! And also, this made me go BWAH!

"Feels like I'm jumping out of a plane without a parachute."

"But look," Daniel said, "There's big soft bed to land on."


Oh, man. That Daniel. He slays me. *is slayed*

Thank you!

Date: 2004-08-31 06:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Hee. Your icon slays me.

::stares at icon::

Oh yeah. Slayed. *g*

Date: 2004-08-29 08:13 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] reedfem.livejournal.com
Hot & sweaty Grrrl snippet. Yum.

What else did you bring us from vacation?


Date: 2004-09-01 06:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Glad you liked! ::kisses::

What else did you bring us from vacation?

Hmmm. Dirty laundry, a Cape May T-shirt, and a couple of extra pounds around the belly?

Date: 2004-08-29 09:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gigitrek.livejournal.com
Listen--we're gay. We love each other. It's scary as hell but we've got to just get naked and deal with it."

Way to get with the program, Daniel!

Great snippet, Grrrl. Five stars indeed. (And two thumbs up, interpret that as you will.)

Date: 2004-09-01 06:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Stars and thumbs, yay! Methinks that some sort of kinky General sex.

Thank you!

Date: 2004-08-29 11:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] karendreamer.livejournal.com
OK, I don't care how many times Fra has proposed to you, I'll go toe to toe with her for you. You are a delightful talented writer who writes deliciously hot fic.

Thank you.........Karen

Date: 2004-09-01 06:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, that's so nice of you to say. ::blushes:: I'm glad you enjoyed it, cliches and all.

And I'll be happy to run away with you both. *g*

Date: 2004-09-01 11:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] story-girl.livejournal.com
Adorableness! I love your Daniel. :)

Date: 2004-09-02 08:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
He's just an adorable kind of guy. *g* At least Jack thinks so.

Glad you liked!

Date: 2009-10-13 05:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] theeverdream.livejournal.com
This is fantastic and here is why:
You did the J/D first time without having to go through endless dialogue about shouldwe/canwe/helpwhatisgoingon (which can be good, but not always) and you did it in a way that it makes sense - doesn't feel like you're leaving anything out to make it easier to write or anything, but feels like you just chose this particular moment to write about.
I hope that makes sense!

Date: 2009-10-14 04:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed. *g*
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