Vignette

Apr. 20th, 2004 10:32 am
thegrrrl2002: (warm daniel)
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See my beautiful icon of Daniel being beautiful? Salieri made it. It's beautiful. As is she.

It somehow inspired this odd little Jack/Daniel ficlet. Or vignette.



A Bird in the Hand Gets Tangled in the Sheets

Bird. It had to represent the word "bird", Daniel decides as he strips off his clothes. Which doesn't make any sense--a man living inside a bird.

He slides under the covers carefully, because Jack is already asleep, and has been for hours. It's late. Or early, Daniel thinks as he squints at the clock. Very early. He didn't mean to stay up so long, but the damn bird thing...maybe the bird ate the man?

It makes no sense. He lays on his back, stiff and sore as a result of hunching over his laptop all night. He frowns and rearranges the pillows, tugs on the blankets, trying to relax, hoping the answer will come in his dreams. But when he closes his eyes all he sees are the runes flashing inside his eyelids. Translated runes in blue, untranslated runes in red, maybe-translated in orange. Complete translated phrases are chartreuse. Complete phrases like "When a man takes a wife, he must provide for her, keep her fat and happy and live inside a bird."

He sighs, because he knows that can't be right. Even though he went ahead and color-coded it anyway. It could be a parable, except that most of the tablets he had translated so far encompassed the basic laws of a people long gone from P3X-9944.

Daniel decides to stop dwelling on it so that he can go to sleep.

Shifting onto his side, he edges toward Jack, drawn to his warmth. Jack is still sleeping soundly, curled up in a tight ball. That someone so long could fold himself up in such a way always amuses Daniel. He moves closer and closer, until his chest pressed against Jack's back, then draws his knees up so Jack's ass is firmly ensconced in his lap. Jack is naked. Daniel likes that, likes having all that skin to press up against. He also likes to think that he can still smell his sweat on Jack's body, even though they showered after making love earlier in the evening. As he lays a gentle hand on Jack's hip, he listens to the soothing rhythm of Jack's breathing and begins to relax.

But still, a bird? Figuring it out wasn't going to save the world, and Daniel knows that. Which doesn't keep him from ruminating over the phrase. Could it be "living among the birds"? A way of saying that a man had to keep birds once he got a wife? Maybe she expected fresh eggs every morning for breakfast. Or songbirds. She wanted to listen to songbirds once she was married. Living inside a bird. Dwelling inside a bird. A bird-shaped cottage? In honor of some sort of great bird god?

Daniel's right hip is beginning to ache, probably from a stumble he took while recording images on the walls. He straightens a leg, seeking a comfortable position, reluctant to unwind himself from around Jack. The image of the rune is still in his mind, color-coded in bright, cheery green. Bird. It was definitely "bird".

Bird-brained, that's what Jack would tell him. He smiles and presses a kiss against the nape of Jack's neck. Jack's hair tickles his nose, and he rubs at it with a knuckle, sniffing. He wonders if something is in bloom, if his allergies are acting up. It is definitely springtime despite the chill air. Birds nested in the springtime. Maybe the man was supposed to build a nest for his new wife. Not literally, of course, but a new dwelling, so they could live like birds.

He wonders if they stuffed worms down their children's throats.

Sleep. He's waiting to drift off into sleep, because this isn't important at all. But there are runes and ruins and birds flying his head. And his hip hurts. Just a little achy kind of hurt. He shifts again, easing onto his back, his hand sliding off of Jack's hip. Contemplates getting up to take some aspirin. He scratches his shin with his right foot, thinks it over some more, and decides against it. He wriggles toward Jack again, so that their bodies are touching.

It could simply be a typo. The writer didn't mean to chisel "bird" at all. Perhaps a pretty girl in short robes distracted him, or maybe even a pretty boy in short robes. Carrying a bird.

Or maybe people of P3X-9944 really did live inside giant birds. Warm and cozy, surrounded by feathers, like a living down blanket. Daniel rubs his nose again. A down blanket would probably make him sneeze. He thinks about getting up to take an antihistamine.

He opens his eyes, stares at the ceiling, and wonders if he switched off the coffeepot.

He finds that his hip hurts less if he brings his right knee up. Like a seagull on the beach, one leg tucked up. A giant seagull, large enough--

A hand reaches down between Daniel's legs and grabs hold of his balls, startling him. "Daniel," a gruff voice says, "Do you think you could stop with the moving around?"

Daniel freezes. "Jack? Did I wake you?" Daniel's voice is pitched a touch higher than usual.

"Yes."

A succinct answer, in a low growl. The hand tightens. Daniel allows himself to be pulled onto his side, so that he is face to face with Jack in the dark. "I'm sorry." To demonstrate how sorry he is, Daniel kisses Jack's sleepy lips.

Jack grunts, as if he is considering Daniel's apology. His hand is still between Daniel's legs, and he is caressing Daniel's half-hard dick with his thumb.

Daniel drapes one leg over Jack's hip, leaning into his touch. Hands on Jack's chest, he kisses Jack again, and this time Jack's lips aren't quite so sleepy. "I want to live inside a bird with you," Daniel whispers against his cheek.

After a moment's hesitation, Jack answers. "Okay."

Touched by the fact that Jack understands, Daniel pushes Jack onto his back and stretches out over his body. Jack sighs, either in surrender or contentment or both, spreading his legs and opening his mouth.

Somewhere, a bird begins to sing.

Date: 2004-04-20 09:31 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] vickita.livejournal.com
Somewhere, a bird begins to sing.

I can hear it.

::blisses out::

Date: 2004-04-21 06:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
So glad I could make you blissy! thank you!

Man, this is sweet!

Date: 2004-04-20 10:59 am (UTC)
ext_1204: (Default)
From: [identity profile] kylielee1000.livejournal.com
Sweet in a way that is not meant to imply saccharine-ness, but something simpler.

I like here how the bird is associated with domesticity, with love, and nesting. And finally, with simple togetherness.

Re: Man, this is sweet!

Date: 2004-04-21 06:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Aww, thank you, sweetie! You are too kind.

I like to think of them as nesting together.

Date: 2004-04-20 11:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com
Oh, this was just charming. Daniel's ruminations about the damn birds were utterly in character. I felt like I was in his head, except he probably wasn't chuckling and I most definitely was. Thank you for this. It brightened my day.

Date: 2004-04-21 06:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Chelle! Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. I think we've all had these kind of nights. Even me, and I usually sleep like a log.

Date: 2004-04-20 01:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gigitrek.livejournal.com
Very tweet. (Hey, I spent a lot of time coming up with that one.)

I agree, pondering the linguistic application of birds is very Daniel-like. And getting it anyway is very Jack-like. So well done.

Date: 2004-04-21 06:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
LOL, Gigi! Your icon is killing me. It's marvelous. Thank you for the laugh.

Tweet? ::groans:: That's worthy of Jack.

And thank you for the kind words. You're tweet, yourself.

Date: 2004-04-20 03:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kelly-girl.livejournal.com
Awww, I liked this and Daniel was very in character that these thoughts kept running through his head. Loved Jack too.

Date: 2004-04-21 06:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, Kelly_girl! I feel like I'm finally getting a grip on Daniel's character. He's been a bit of a challenge for me. But he certainly does seem like the type who just can't give up on a puzzle.

Date: 2004-04-20 04:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] barkley.livejournal.com
"I want to live inside a bird with you," Daniel whispers against his cheek.

After a moment's hesitation, Jack answers. "Okay."


I like!

Date: 2004-04-21 07:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed.

Date: 2004-04-20 04:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] destina.livejournal.com
"I want to live inside a bird with you," Daniel whispers against his cheek.

After a moment's hesitation, Jack answers. "Okay."


LOL! See, I love that. Because Jack gets it. Sort of. And even if he doesn't? It doesn't matter. Awww.

Happy, now. :-)

Date: 2004-04-21 07:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh! I made you smiley. My work here is done.

I figure Jack is a big-picture kind of guy, so he sort of gets it. He's hazy on the details, but he knows what's in Daniel's heart.

Thank you! And thank you for the rec. I'm very flattered.

Date: 2004-04-20 09:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tripoli8.livejournal.com
I hope you don't mind me friending you. I loved the vignette; I *loved* Jack's reaction to the bird thing.

Date: 2004-04-21 07:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, tempe! I'm very tickled that you enjoyed this. And I friended you back.

Date: 2004-04-21 04:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stephicozar.livejournal.com
Awwww, how perfect was that? Loved every bit of it. I found it very in character and endearing for both of them.

I hope you don't mind me adding you!

Date: 2004-04-21 07:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm very flattered. Grinning, here. Friending you right back.

And I totally dig that icon. I can *so* relate.

Date: 2004-04-21 06:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ningyouhime.livejournal.com
::waves and friends you::

Wonderful as always. Thank you. =D

Date: 2004-04-21 07:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::waves and friends back::

Thank you! You're very sweet. I'm glad you enjoyed.

Date: 2004-04-21 08:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gypsy86.livejournal.com
despite having only seen a scattering of SG1 episodes, I laughed my ass of reading this. Cause I have had nights like that. Not more than a week ago, in fact. All you want is to get to sleep and your brain missed the memo and you just can't get it to disconnect, no matter how hard you try. Very realistic.

Date: 2004-04-21 06:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Ain't it the truth? It's almost like the brain goes on overdrive because there's nothing to distract it.

Glad you enjoyed it, dearie!

Date: 2004-04-21 08:52 am (UTC)
ext_12460: acquired from fanpop.com (lookedlikethis by Daughtershade)
From: [identity profile] akite.livejournal.com
I saw a link to this on Destina's journal and recognized the name. I remember you from when I read Enterprise slash. Hi! I liked this one too, so sweet in a non-sacchrine way. Plus it gives me a chance to use my Daniel icon. ::g::

Date: 2004-04-21 06:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Hey! How ya doing?! Love the icon. Biceps. Yum.

Thanks so much for the kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed!

Niiiiiiiice....

Date: 2004-04-22 09:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] carolyn-claire.livejournal.com
That's a great Daniel voice you have, there, and an endearing Jack, and a lovely little moment. ::applauds::

Re: Niiiiiiiice....

Date: 2004-04-23 10:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! You're very kind. I'm glad you enjoyed. Daniel's voice has always been a bit of a challenge for me, so I really appreciate the comment.

Date: 2004-04-25 03:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] not-vacillating.livejournal.com
That's lovely! Thank you for sharing.

Date: 2004-04-25 02:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Date: 2004-04-25 06:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] widget285.livejournal.com
I loved this. Loved the way Daniel's overactive mind refused to shut down even after his body is slowly beginning to collapse. That strikes me as an innately Daniel like trait. Also loved the way that Jack just seemed to get it. He doesn't always understand Daniel's strange non-sequiturs (and you have to admit someone like Daniel probably comes up with some interesting ones now and then) but still Jack gets it. They don't need long minded, deep, probing soulful discussions about what they mean to one another because they already know. Everything that needs to be said gets said with a gesture, a look or a really odd comment like "I want to live inside a bird with you."

I just love it when someone gets it right. Thanks for making my day.

Date: 2004-04-26 08:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh! I adore your icon. ::sigh:: I could just stare at it all day.

Thank you so much for the lovely comments. I'm so flattered. You made *my* day. I think you nailed it--Jack doesn't always understand, but he gets it anyway. They're on the same warped little wavelength.

(no subject)

From: [identity profile] widget285.livejournal.com - Date: 2004-04-26 04:53 pm (UTC) - Expand

Date: 2005-05-05 03:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] out-there.livejournal.com
"I want to live inside a bird with you," Daniel whispers against his cheek.

After a moment's hesitation, Jack answers. "Okay."


Oh! That is so adorable I can't believe it. Seriously, seriously adorable. Random untranslatedable phrases shouldn't be able to make my heart melt, but that does.

Thank you for making me smile this morning.

Date: 2005-05-05 12:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! That's so sweet of you to say. I really enjoyed writing this weird little story, and I'm really glad it worked for you.

I figure Jack comes to expect things like this from Daniel. He just goes with the flow. *g*

Date: 2005-05-05 08:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cupidsbow.livejournal.com
Best "I love you" ever. Thank you.

Date: 2005-05-05 12:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Aw, thank you! I'm fond of this odd little story, and I'm really touched by your comment. You made my day. *g*

Date: 2005-05-05 06:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] miriam-heddy.livejournal.com
you. make. me. happy.

period.

Date: 2005-05-05 06:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Aw! Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. I was curious as to the spate of comments on this fic, then I found the rec, and gosh, how sweet, it really made me happy. I always liked this fic.

And I adore your icon. Sweet!

Date: 2005-05-05 07:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dancinguniverse.livejournal.com
This was very sweet. Very Daniel, and I love that Jack doesn't even ask anymore, either knows what he means or knows to just agree, but either way it's adorable. I love the way daniel's mind works, though. Great job.

Date: 2005-05-05 08:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

I think Jack's a big-picture kind of guy. He doesn't sweat the details with Daniel. Especially when Daniel kisses him. *g*

Date: 2005-05-09 02:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] julad.livejournal.com
My knowledge of SG-1 is patchy at best, since I haven't been able to get my hands on many episodes yet, but I have a definite Thing for Jack and Daniel, and this gets right at the Thing I have, in so many ways. :) I could live inside a bird with this story, I really could-- it articulates a devotion and a familiarity that makes sweet seem too shallow a word to describe it.

(Coming via thefourthvine as well.)

Date: 2005-05-10 04:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you so much, you're very kind! Jack and Daniel just have this great *thing* for each other, don't they? It's so...blatant, whether interpreted as slash or simply a friendship. It's a marvelous connection.

I'm really so touched that this fic got rec'd. It's always been an odd little favorite of mine. *g*

Date: 2005-05-20 01:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sarren.livejournal.com
Woah..for a minute there I found myself liking Daniel. *not processing*


(there's a huge compliment there, but I understand if you're hung up on 'omg the bitch doesn't like Daniel!' I feel the same when somebody says 'but McKay's not even attractive')

Date: 2005-05-20 02:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::giggles::

No problem! I'm very flattered then, that I could make you like Daniel for a moment. He can be a little annoying at times.

But McKay is *always* pretty. What's wrong with those people?

(no subject)

From: [identity profile] sarren.livejournal.com - Date: 2005-05-20 02:36 pm (UTC) - Expand

Date: 2005-09-04 12:48 pm (UTC)
ext_1770: @ _jems_ (Stargate Daniel)
From: [identity profile] oxoniensis.livejournal.com
Ah, I love the way you've captured Daniel in these sleep, middle of the night internal ramblings. And Jack's reaction, with his simple okay, understanding Daniel rather than his words, was just perfect.

Date: 2006-01-08 05:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oops, this seemed to have slipped through the cracks. A very, very belated thank you. I'm rather fond of this ficlet, myself--I love to think of them like this, quietly understanding each other.

Date: 2005-10-15 12:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chalcopyrite.livejournal.com
Reading this looong after you wrote it, as I tumble into *yet* another fandom and comb [livejournal.com profile] thefourthvine for recs . . .

I think perhaps what I liked best is that Daniel never figured out what that bit of tablet meant, but Jack understood anyway. This felt like feathers, or a down comforter, light and warm. Thank you!

Date: 2005-10-17 02:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh, thank you so much! I've always been fond of this odd little ficlet, and your comment is very welcome. I figured Jack has learned when it's important to just go along with Daniel *g*

I'm so glad you enjoyed!

Date: 2009-10-13 05:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] theeverdream.livejournal.com
I just adore how it goes from Jack being grumpy at Daniel to the sweetness. It's very real.

Date: 2009-10-14 04:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you - I've always been rather fond of this ficlet, and it's so nice to still get comments on it!

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