thegrrrl2002: (Sheppard eyes)
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Ever have one of those fics that's supposed to be a fun little distraction, and turns out to be anything but? I mean, come on, John and Rodney, doing porny things in a jumper. How hard can that be? But this damn fic has been making me crazy, so I'm posting it now, just to get it the hell out of my hands because I can't stop messing with it. ::grumbles:: Consider that a warning.

Many thanks go to [livejournal.com profile] wickdzoot and [livejournal.com profile] mmmchelle for their thoughtful suggestions and comments, because I would have just trashed it otherwise.

Gosh, I'm sure everyone's just dying to read it now. And by the way, [livejournal.com profile] carolyn_claire? This is all your fault. And [livejournal.com profile] mmmchelle's too.



Exposed

John was unpacking the sleeping bags when he felt an arm slide around his waist. He leaned back against a broad chest and sighed contentedly. "Hey there, Rodney."

Rodney kissed the side of his neck. "Major."

John closed his eyes and let the sleeping bags fall to floor of the jumper. Warm lips, gentle kisses and a scrape of whiskers--god, it was good. Bonemeltingly good.

"I thought dinner was going to go on forever. I hope I didn't drag you away too soon," Rodney breathed in his ear.

John shivered. "I don't think so. They were probably glad to see us go."

"I'm not so sure," Rodney said. "For some bizarre reason they seem to find you enormously charming."

"Well, compared to you, I am," John pointed out.

"Hmmm. Good point."

"Anyway, I think we lingered for the socially acceptable amount of time." Dinner with the Athosians had been a pleasant enough affair, but John had been more than happy to escape to the quiet of the jumper for the night. And to Rodney.

"Ah, yes, socially acceptable." Rodney sounded amused. "At least one of us is."

John tilted his head back and with a mock glare, said, "Speaking of acceptable, don't think I didn't notice that thing with the leg during dinner."

"Huh? What thing?" Rodney asked. His cock nudged John's ass.

"Are you telling me all that rubbing was purely accidental?"

"I have absolutely no idea what you are talking about." Rodney nipped at John's skin, and John swallowed a gasp of delight. "You obviously have a wild imagination." Still, Rodney was chuckling as he slid his hands under John's shirt, caressing his stomach.

John moaned as Rodney's hands moved up over his nipples. It had driven him to distraction, having Rodney's hard thigh pressed against his as he tried to make polite dinner conversation. He should have told Rodney to cut it out, they were on duty, in public, and he had to be professional. He was The Major, for god's sake. Must have been the beer, making him mellow enough not to care. Or maybe he just liked having a reminder of who they were, no matter who he was being at the moment. "You're always you," he said suddenly.

Rodney's hands stopped moving. "Of course I am. Who else would I be?"

John shrugged. "I can't imagine."

"Exactly. Now take off this shirt." Rodney tugged at the hem of John's shirt, and John obligingly lifted his arms. "There. Much better," Rodney said, tossing the shirt aside.

It was very much better. "I'm probably kind of stinky. Sorry," John said over his shoulder. "I spent the afternoon teaching the kids to play football."

Rodney licked his neck, hands busily exploring. "I know. I was watching." He tweaked John's nipples.

"Oh." John covered Rodney's hands with his. God, he loved the way Rodney touched him. "You, uh, were watching me? Really? I thought you were working on that solar panel."

"I was doing both. Multi-tasking, you've heard of the concept? I had to keep waiting for the panel to recalibrate," Rodney explained. "And I like watching you. Especially when you're running around, being so--I don't know. Entertaining?"

"Right. But it was a lot of fun," John said with a nod. "They're great kids."

Rodney snorted. "If you say so."

"I do say so." One of Rodney's hands began sliding down his chest. "Although, I'm thinking this might be a little more fun," John breathlessly added as Rodney's hands reached his stomach.

"More fun than a bunch of screaming little kids?" Rodney nuzzled his neck. "How very flattering."

John's stomach muscles twitched in anticipation as Rodney's hand slipped beneath the waistband of his pants. "A hell of a lot more fun. And you don't have to just watch."

Rodney's hand stopped just north of John's eagerly throbbing cock. "Oooh. Yes," he said, distractedly. "Yes, excellent idea. Brilliant, even."

"What?" John asked. "What? Damn it, why'd you stop?" He pushed on Rodney's hand, but to his dismay, Rodney removed it.

"Come on, come on, turn around," Rodney said, his voice quick and impatient.

John turned to face him. "What are you doing?"

"You'll see." Rodney unfastened John's pants, then knelt down on the floor, pulling John's pants and boxers down with him.

"Oh." Okay, blow-job. John was certainly on board with that. So was his dick. He let Rodney slip his boots off, and then stepped out of his clothes, arms braced against the jumper wall for balance.

"Come here," Rodney motioned. "Sit right down here."

Okay, so no blow-job. Curious, John slid down the wall until he was sitting in front of Rodney, legs sprawled out to either side. Rodney obviously had an idea, and that was exciting, because Rodney's ideas were always good ones. Especially when they involved nakedness.

"Ah, nice," Rodney said, with barely contained eagerness. He ran his hands up John's shins and down over his thighs. John squirmed under his touch.

"Rodney." John grabbed him and pulled him in for a kiss. Rodney's warm, heavy hands moved to the inside of thighs, and whoa, that was good, and it was even better when Rodney cupped his balls and stroked his cock. More kisses, down along the side of his jaw, and then Rodney shifted. A warm mouth on his nipple and Rodney sucked hard, making John cry out and clutch at the back of Rodney's head. It was crazy, how much Rodney made him feel, made him so hot that he couldn't stand it. There was no fighting it; no way he could play it cool with Rodney. He didn't even bother to try anymore--he simply went with it, letting the heat take him over.

"Here," Rodney said, taking John's hand and sliding it down John's body, until it rested on his cock. "Like this." He pushed John's legs further apart, then backed away, his eyes never leaving John's body.

"What?" John asked, panting. He looked down at his cock, then back up at Rodney with a small, embarrassed laugh. "You don't really mean--?"

"Would you? Please?"

Christ, Rodney wanted to watch him jerk off. "What do you want me to do?" he asked. No one had ever asked him to do anything like this before.

"Whatever you'd normally do for yourself." Rodney licked his lips. "Is that all right? Can you do that?"

John's hand tightened involuntarily on his cock. He didn't know what it was Rodney wanted to see and he was pretty sure he didn't do anything particularly interesting. And with Rodney watching--with those eyes on him--could he even make himself come?

But Rodney looked so hopeful, and he had watched John playing earlier. Maybe this wasn't all that different. John ran his fingers down along his cock, it was still stiff and hard and very much interested in going along. "All right. I'll try," John promised, shrugging. "But would you at least take your damn clothes off?"

"Oh." Rodney seemed to have forgotten that he was still dressed. He quickly pulled his shirt off over his head, then rose up on his knees to push down his pants, erect cock bouncing against a pale thigh as he discarded them. "There, is that better?"

John nodded. Taking a deep breath, he pulled his legs up and began stroking his cock. He felt uncomfortably exposed. Naked. More naked than Rodney, who was kneeling in front of him, looking at him like he was the tenth wonder of the universe and that was sort of cool and intimidating all at the same time. "Rodney," he sighed, maybe in protest, maybe in complaint; he didn't know. He moved his hand in short, hard strokes, going for the most effective approach.

"Maybe a little slower?" Rodney asked.

John met Rodney's eyes and nodded, face growing warm under Rodney's intent stare. Ducking his head with a small smile, he saw that Rodney was touching himself. Just fondling his cock, giving it a little squeeze, strong, clever fingers wrapped around a thick red shaft and John liked the way it looked.

"I always want to watch you during sex," Rodney said, "the way you are, you get so caught up in it. The way you move--you always look amazing. Like you do now."

John grew warmer, because he hadn't known that, hadn't known Rodney was that aware of him. And really, it was Rodney who looked amazing, sitting there in front of him, naked skin glowing the soft yellow light of the lamp. John loved the feel of that skin sliding against his, loved the way Rodney held him when they were naked, as if he was never going to let go. He kept watching Rodney's fingers caress his cock. He wanted it. He always wanted it. Wanted Rodney to touch him, wanted that big hard cock inside of him. Wanted it in his mouth, pushing into his throat, he wanted it up his ass, spreading him wide open. He wanted everything.

John reached down with his other hand to tug gently at his balls and moaned quietly, surprising himself. Maybe this wasn't so bad after all. He could do this, he could come like this. He glanced up and yes, Rodney was most definitely still watching, lips parted and when he caught John looking, he gave a quick, excited grin. The expression on his face--he really was enjoying it, so damn happy and turned on, just because John was. John watched him touch his balls, and his hand moved lightly over his cock in the same rhythm as John's. Breathing heavy, his chest rising and falling and John realized they were breathing in unison. He wasn't doing this alone, he wasn't performing, Rodney was right there with him, feeling it with him.

"Oh god," John gasped. "Rodney." Hand moving faster, he spread his legs wide, and yes, it was so damn good and Rodney could watch all he wanted, because hell, Rodney watched him all the time, didn't he? Rodney knew exactly who he was, had seen him at his best and his cold-hearted bastard worst and John couldn't hide from him. Rodney could tear him open and look inside and it would still be okay, oh yes, they would still be good, they would still touch and fuck and his dick was burning hot in his hand--

John came in a burst of heat and light, heels digging into the floor--good, so excruciatingly good. His head fell back, and he was still shaking with pleasure when Rodney lunged forward and climbed over him, kissed him frantically, tongue pushing into his open mouth. Rodney was jerking himself off now, fast and furious and John grabbed hold of his slick, sweaty body. He tried to break away because he had to suck Rodney's cock, had to suck it right now, to suck and swallow him down. But then Rodney moaned sharply into his mouth and came, spilling onto John's already wet stomach.

"Oh, yeah, Rodney," John whispered, loving the heat pouring out all over him, the way Rodney whimpered against his cheek. He had made Rodney that hot.

"Oh." Rodney leaned his forehead against John's. "Oh jesus. Was that all right, did you like it?"

John stroked down Rodney's back. "It was kind of weird at first," he admitted. "But I like how it ended. I liked," he thought for a moment, then continued, "how you liked it."

"How could I not like seeing you like that?" Rodney kissed him, hard, then pulled back and looked John up and down. "I like seeing you like this, too. I really like it." He ran a finger through the mess on John's stomach and then slipped the wet finger into his mouth, licking it.

John blinked at him, startled, then reached forward and kissed him, tasting the sharpness on his tongue. He felt weird, like Rodney had turned him inside out. Like he'd still be naked when he got dressed. Finally he broke away. "I'm getting kind of drippy here. Think you could get me something to clean up with?"

"Oh. Of course." Rodney patted his hip and crawled away, grabbing a small towel and tossing it to John. While John wiped himself off, Rodney rolled out the mats and unzipping the sleeping bags. "Ah." He flopped down on his back, smiling to himself, looking utterly pleased and content. John found it necessary to crawl over and lay on top of him, stretching out over his solid body.

Rodney grunted. "You know, you may be skinny but you're not exactly light." Still, he wrapped his arms around John, holding him firmly in place.

John ignored the jibe. "What do you see?" he asked, propping himself up on his arms to stare down at Rodney.

Rodney frowned. "Where? What are you talking about?"

"When you watch me. What do you see?"

"I see you," Rodney replied, his expression growing puzzled.

John touched Rodney's face, thumb skimming along his cheek. "Don't ever stop, okay?" he asked, unable to keep the quiet desperation from his voice.

He stopped Rodney's next question with a kiss, and the one after that, too.

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Date: 2005-06-14 04:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_inbetween_/
Mmmmh. *sigh* Being ... seen. Yes *nods*

Date: 2005-06-14 05:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
It's very important, isn't it?

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Date: 2005-06-14 04:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] karendreamer.livejournal.com
Perfect, as usual from you. Hot, romantic, full of passion....the only way they can be.

Date: 2005-06-14 05:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, sweetie. I'm glad you liked it. It gave me a lot of trouble. ::glares at John and Rodney::

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Date: 2005-06-14 04:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wickdzoot.livejournal.com
:purrs: I thought it turned out quite nicely, even if I wasn't much help.....

Date: 2005-06-14 05:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, darling zoot! And you were very much help. And enouraging, when I was feeling very discouraged. ::clings to you::

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Date: 2005-06-14 04:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com
You did it justice, sweetie, you really did.

/pets/

Date: 2005-06-14 05:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::collapses in a graceful heap::

I'm still blaming you for it all. *g*

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Date: 2005-06-14 04:42 pm (UTC)
spikedluv: (mckay_itallcomesclear_goldie_gal)
From: [personal profile] spikedluv
Rodney knew exactly who he was, had seen him at his best and his cold-hearted bastard worst and John couldn't hide from him. Rodney could tear him open and look inside and it would still be okay

*~*~*

"When you watch me. What do you see?"
"I see you," Rodney replied, his expression growing puzzled.
John touched Rodney's face, thumb skimming along his cheek. "Don't ever stop, okay?"


Absolutely wonderful! That made me just want to melt. Plus, yummy sex. Yay! *g*

Date: 2005-06-14 05:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, that makes me very happy to hear! Really. Really truly.

Date: 2005-06-14 04:56 pm (UTC)
ext_8600: (Shep oral sex)
From: [identity profile] reedfem.livejournal.com
I think I see what you mean. Not that this isn't a terrific story, it is and I'm going to have to shake you if you don't stop dis'ing your own stuff...

But yeah, I can see where you were going for pure porny fun, but then John wanted to get all thinky about it. ::spanks naughty John:: Rodney likes to watch. Guh. Play ball for me baby...

Uhm, I'll stop now. I must go tend my balky upload.

This was lovely, I tell you. Lovely.

Date: 2005-06-14 05:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
See, that's it exactly. It was supposed to be a frolic. A naughty frolic. Then things got all weird. John, just get over yourself, okay? You're pretty, and we Rodney likes to watch you. It's not the end of the world!

Sheesh.

::hugs:: I'm so glad it worked for you.

Date: 2005-06-14 05:02 pm (UTC)
ext_2331: (mcshep read between)
From: [identity profile] kageygirl.livejournal.com
::hugs:: Your fun little distraction may have turned on you and gone all deep and lovely and thoughtful, but I'm selfishly not seeing that as a bad thing. *g*

"You're always you," he said suddenly.

Rodney's hands stopped moving. "Of course I am. Who else would I be?"

John shrugged. "I can't imagine."


See, that? Is just gorgeous, and insightful. Oh, really nice, Grrrl. I'm glad you didn't trash it. *g*

Date: 2005-06-14 05:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, that's so lovely of you to say. It did get all deep and thoughtful when I wasn't expecting it to, yet I had no idea what those thoughts really were about, so I wound up going all over the place and then I had to undo all that and make it coherent.

It was very confusing. ::is still confused::

But you liked! Yay!

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Date: 2005-06-14 05:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ex-danvers514.livejournal.com
naked skin glowing the soft yellow light of the lamp

Ever since Century Hotel, this is how I always imagine naked Rodney now ;-)

"When you watch me. What do you see?"

"I see you," Rodney replied, his expression growing puzzled.

John touched Rodney's face, thumb skimming along his cheek. "Don't ever stop, okay?" he asked, unable to keep the quiet desperation from his voice.

He stopped Rodney's next question with a kiss, and the one after that, too.


That was my absolute favorite part and the fact that the fic ended with it was even better. I especially liked the quiet desperation.

Even more, I loved that Rodney is puzzled that John doesn't know what Rodney sees. And then you have John's hope that Rodney will keep seeing what he sees (a real John Sheppard I expect).

Aww, man, I loved this :-)

Date: 2005-06-14 05:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::squeals::

You liked it, you liked it! *g* I'm so glad. I think I was still haunted by "Under the Skin", which is one of the most gorgeous fics ever, and that was why it kept getting so serious and thinky. When they were supposed to be frolicking, damn it!

And yup, Century Hotel all the way. Fabulous lighting.

Fabulous ass.

::goes to happy place::

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Date: 2005-06-14 05:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shetiger.livejournal.com
Mmmm, the porn was nice, but it's these kind of bits that really get me:

Or maybe he just liked having a reminder of who they were, no matter who he was being at the moment. "You're always you," he said suddenly.

Ahh, John. Isn't it nice that both Rodney and grrrl understand you?

Nicely done, even if it did drive you batty. :)

Date: 2005-06-14 06:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, dear. I'm recovering now. *g* I'm glad the emotion behind the porn was effective. It was all over the place for a while there.

Date: 2005-06-14 05:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] 20thcenturyvole.livejournal.com
Ooh! Agh! Guh! *melts*

Weirdly, masturbation fic doesn't often do it for me, but this was so incredibly sweet and not about the porn as much as the, you know, the *Rodney* and the *John* and them being so right for each other, and it was a total goo-inducing thing.

Lovely lovely and thrice lovely. You rock.

Date: 2005-06-14 06:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh, thank you so much! I induced goo! *g* You're sweet.

Oddly enough, masturbation fics don't usually do it for me, either. Although some have been quite effective and nice. Maybe that was part of my problem with this darn thing.

Date: 2005-06-14 05:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nullabona.livejournal.com
Very well done – this appeared effortlessly delightful.

Date: 2005-06-14 06:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
It did?

::faints::

Now see, that's just wonderful to hear. ::is happy::

Date: 2005-06-14 06:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] carolyn-claire.livejournal.com
Heee! I'll shoulder a little blame--who wouldn't? You got something so important, there, to this particular kink (though it doesn't always have to be articulated to make the kink good)--you got the vulnerability, the hyper-awareness of one's self and the broken-open, naked feeling, the one that lasts, after. "He felt weird, like Rodney had turned him inside out. Like he'd still be naked when he got dressed." Oh, yeah, that, right there--the first-time strangeness of touching himself in front of Rodney, all the way to the knowing that he'd changed in some way through doing it, gone to a new place inside himself. And you wove it all into John's realizing that he could be himself with Rodney, and still be loved, that Rodney saw, and understood, and wanted--so cool. Beautifully done, babe. *grope*

Date: 2005-06-14 06:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] miera-c.livejournal.com
*points upward* what she said. Including the groping. ;)

I liked the different varieties of "naked" that were at work. John being that self-conscious isn't something I remember seeing before - everyone seems to think of him as being the more uninhibited person (that goes for het and non McShep too). But it makes some sense - he's not hiding behind his persona here and that'll freak anyone out.

I tried to start a story the other day and the last part is good but doesn't match up with the start and what I thought was going to happen - like the whole thing skipped a groove in the middle and I'm staring going "how the hell did this happen?" and I don't know how to fix it. *sigh* I feel your pain.

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Date: 2005-06-14 06:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sp23.livejournal.com
Oh, that was just fabulous. I loved this insight into John's psyche and Rodney's *getting* him, even though he doesn't understand what a big deal that is to John. Because Rodney? Is so very much Rodney.

Date: 2005-06-15 02:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, thank you! I'm so glad their interaction worked. Rodney is very Rodney, at an entirely different level than John is at being John. If that makes any sense. *g*

I'm happy that you liked it!

Date: 2005-06-14 06:12 pm (UTC)
ext_16366: (Sheppard Getaway by icon_ascension)
From: [identity profile] cheights.livejournal.com
Thud! Rodney watching as John touched himself got me all flushed. *g* I love how you showed John's awkwardness at first, until he realizes that Rodney watched him all the time, knew exactly who he was. And I really like the angsty reflection of that at the end when John asks "What do you see?" and Rodney replies with "I see you." John definitely comes across to me as someone who lives his life keeping his inner self away from the surface, so it's got to pretty powerful to be seen, and comforting to be seen by someone you love and trust.

"More fun than a bunch of screaming little kids?" Rodney nuzzled his neck. "How very flattering."

LOL, this cracked me up. I could so hear him saying that.

A very hot and touching fic. Thanks for brightening my afternoon :)

Date: 2005-06-15 02:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Ooooh, I made you flushed. ::is proud::

And thank you, such lovely comments! I do agree, John keeps a lot of himself hidden, and I just love the contrast with Rodney, because of course, Rodney is full-out Rodney, all the time. Especially when it comes to kids. *g*

Date: 2005-06-14 06:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spubba.livejournal.com
Nnnngh. Hot. I love mutual-masturbation scenes.

Date: 2005-06-15 02:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2005-06-14 06:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] casspeach.livejournal.com
Let me add my vote to the cacophany proclaiming how glad we all are that you didn't trash this. It was lovely, hot and sweet and perfectly them. I loved a lot of the lines other people have highlighted, but this one Like he'd still be naked when he got dressed. got me in the gut. It was just such a perfect evocation of the relationship you have set up between them, and that I can see between them myself.

Liked this too He stopped Rodney's next question with a kiss, and the one after that, too. as a perfect and almost throwaway comment on them both. It kind of caught up with me after a moment, like a delayed reaction.

Thanks for this, it really cheered me up.

Date: 2005-06-15 02:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh thank you, that's really sweet of you! This really drove me crazy. I'm so glad the characterization worked. I love how different Rodney and John are in certain respects. I think it's very intriguing.

And I'm very tickled by your mention of the last line, too. That was quite a struggle. I'm glad I went with that one. *g*

Date: 2005-06-14 06:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] clarkangel.livejournal.com
I feel strangely like a peeping Thomasina reading this. But in a good way. I loved John's feelings here. How he felt exposed. I think what John does is project whatever image he feels a person expects from him, then he takes great delight in shattering that illusion. BUT..with Rodney I feel he's more himself. Cautiously so at times, but still. The connection between them is just THERE. And this story conveyed that.

Yummy.

Date: 2005-06-15 01:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
I feel strangely like a peeping Thomasina reading this.

Thank you, that's a huge compliment!

I think John definitely hides behind a lot of different faces. And Rodney is always Rodney, no matter what. I think he likes that.

Date: 2005-06-14 07:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ilexa.livejournal.com
I'd say you gave up and posted at exactly the right time. Gah, so good. So so good. *melts*

Date: 2005-06-15 01:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
LOL, thank you! You mean I didn't need to switch a couple of sentences around, change the ending yet again, and make it so Rodney was laying on top of John, because I don't know, maybe that would work better, maybe I should change the verb tense, or the POV....

Uh, yeah, maybe I did post at the right time. *g*

Date: 2005-06-14 08:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] probodie.livejournal.com
*loses inability to speak due to dribbling*

Hot. Sexy. Another gorgeous Grrrl fic. :-D

Date: 2005-06-15 01:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Hee! Glad you liked it!

Date: 2005-06-14 09:19 pm (UTC)
zoerayne: (john comicbook)
From: [personal profile] zoerayne
I love how you showed John's vulnerability; it's a side that's rarely shown (or rarely done well, at least *g*) in fanfic, and I really like it.

Lovely, lovely story. Thank you for sharing it!

Date: 2005-06-15 01:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I love exploring John's vulnerable side, I think he definitely has one, and I like to think Rodney is the only one who gets to see it. I'm so glad it worked. Sometimes I'm afraid I might make him a little too smooshy. (But he's so adorable when he's vulnerable!)

Date: 2005-06-14 10:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenlev.livejournal.com
very *guh*. and i love this moment: ""You're always you," he said suddenly."

the way their need to have *who* they both are be seen clearly by each other is quite endearing. and it says something about how much both characters might feel that others don't generally see them truly?

Date: 2005-06-15 01:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you, darling!

I like to think they have something really special together, where they can just be themselves and be accepted. I'll bet neither of them have had a lot of that.

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Date: 2005-06-15 12:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sffan.livejournal.com
Nice and steamy and a lot of substance hiding in there, too. Well done!

Date: 2005-06-15 01:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed!

Date: 2005-06-15 12:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chrissie-m.livejournal.com
The usual trouble with having to work all day, darn it: All I can really say is "yeah, what they all said, up there."

Date: 2005-06-15 01:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
And that's very sweet of you to say.*g* I'm really glad you liked it.

Date: 2005-06-15 04:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousewitchy.livejournal.com
Ohhhhhhhhhh, this was wonderful! Wonderful and perfect, with all its subtle little undertones and John feeling all needy and hesitant and Rodney all earnest and hot and confuzzled, and oh . . . .

::points:: Look at how many conjunctions I just used in that sentence! It's wretched and it's all your fault. I've lost coherency!

Not that I'm complaining. Feel free to do it again. Anytime.

Really. :g:

Date: 2005-06-15 01:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Hee! You're so funny. And I made you make silly sentences. ::is proud::

I'm so glad you enjoyed this, it really gave me fits as I was writing and rewriting and revising and and and...you know how it goes. I'm just so glad to be done with it. I probably should have just put it aside for a couple of days but I'm just *incapable* of doing such a thing. I'm such a dope.

Thank you for the lovely comments!
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