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A little ficlet for [livejournal.com profile] mmmchelle, who is stressed-out and working way too hard.






She had known John was coming. It had been foretold. She had seen him in her mind--a handsome man, with dark hair and eyes, body narrow and long like the grasses in the field. He would come, with his quiet, gentle ways, and he would save them from the beast. She had known this since childhood.

He would come to her, and together, they would achieve ascension.

What she hadn't foreseen was the other one. The loud one. The one who never stopped talking, never stopped questioning. The one who complained about the food they shared with him, the one who refused to meditate (I can already do amazing things with my mind, thank you very much), the one who made her little sister cry.

The one who was not ready for ascension. Who might not ever be.

Together, John and McKay constantly sought escape, not enlightenment. McKay would talk of power sources and field generators, hands waving wildly, and would John nod in agreement. They would disappear into the woods for hours, forsaking the safety of the cloister.

John did not realize he was on the wrong path. It was up to her to change that.

So one morning, as Teer made a simple breakfast, she looked to John's hut. The shutters were drawn, and she thought maybe John was still in bed. She decided she would bring him breakfast, so she could talk to him, alone, without the other one who would interrupt and argue, then ultimately dismiss her. She was the only one who could make John understand who he was and why he was here with them.

She used her mind to see past the walls of John's hut, checking to see if he had arisen.

John had not. He was still in bed, but he wasn't alone.

McKay was with him.

McKay with him, and they were naked, both of them. Naked and in a fierce embrace, legs entwined, John's narrow hips pressing against McKay's body. His hands cupped McKay's face and John was kissing him as if the path to enlightenment could somehow be found in his body.

Teer looked away, shocked. She dropped the breakfast tray and ran from her hut into the fields. She needed to meditate on this, she needed to understand why one had been foretold but the not the other. She needed to think deeply on it. Dropping to her knees, she closed her eyes, emptying her mind her mind and waiting for understanding.

Then she looked back. Just to make sure she had seen properly the first time.

They were still naked. Laying face to face, entirely wrapped up in each other--John's leg slung over McKay's hip, arms wrapped around McKay's shoulders, his head tucked against McKay's neck. McKay had one hand down between John's legs, stroking steadily, shoulder muscles flexing and John rocked his hips in time with McKay's strokes.

It was fascinating, and it was beautiful, two bodies fitting together so perfectly, one golden and lean, the other broad and pale. Teer kept watching as John closed his eyes and tightened his grip on McKay, hands curling into fists against the center of McKay's back. His body twisted and he pushed himself at McKay as if he wasn't yet close enough, straining and shoving with his hips while McKay held steady, immovable as always. Then John shuddered violently, open mouth pressed against McKay's skin to muffle his cries.

John relaxed at last, releasing his hold on McKay and rolling back against the pillows, eyes heavy-lidded and sleepy. McKay followed with gentle kisses, rubbing his nose into John's beard. John laughed, and McKay smiled at him with a sweetness Teer would not have thought him capable of.

And then she understood. Maybe. She couldn't be certain, though. Not yet, anyway. So, as she watched John lift his legs onto McKay's shoulders, sliding down on the pillows and tucking his backside into McKay's lap, she settled in and made herself comfortable for continued enlightenment.

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Date: 2006-01-16 06:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] the-moonmoth.livejournal.com
she settled in and made herself comfortable for continued enlightenment.

*giggles dirtily* Oh yeah.

Very nice, Grrl, thank you :)

Date: 2006-01-16 06:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
*g*

We all could use a little enlightenment, couldn't we?

It would be so pretty. ::sighs::

Date: 2006-01-16 06:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tex.livejournal.com
You and I are on the same page here. John should definitely be with The Loud One. And that Teer - far more enlightened than I imagined!

Date: 2006-01-16 06:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
While there was a lot I liked about the ep, I just would have loved to have seen Rodney stuck in that cloister with John. It would have been quite entertaining.

Date: 2006-01-16 06:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shetiger.livejournal.com
*snickers*

Oh, yeah. That makes it all better.

*waits for continued enlightenment*

Date: 2006-01-16 06:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh, if only! *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 06:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] inthekeyofd.livejournal.com
First, please please apply for a writing position on that show!!

Second, please tell me you wouldn't have used that line that she did on John..I would have in a heartbeat, that is after I recovered from seeing him naked when I changed him out of his Atlantis geer. Funny how she got to be the one to do that??*smile*

Third, screw ascension, I would have watched too. *smile*

And finally, "The other one" you didn't even have to write the name and I immediately knew who you meant, I can't even wrap my brain around Rodney meditating, I can just imagine (and you put it so well) just he would say to that..and lets face it, John was so either falling asleep, trying to get out of the place of boredom and loose fitting clothes, or thinking about what positions Rodney was going to have to get in as payback for leaving him there for so long. *smile*

I have to say, last week sucked, this weekend was *meh* (with the exception of Epiphany--I could watch John with that freakin' stalk of hay for hours..and from the amount of times I've seen it, I think it just may have) and today started off so badly I have a headache that could knock out a small city...so you know, I TOTALLY APPRECIATED THIS!!!

Date: 2006-01-16 06:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Second, please tell me you wouldn't have used that line that she did on John

Which line? When she said she had been waiting all her life for him?

She was kinda creepy during that scene, I thought.

And if I was the one who had to change him out of his Atlantis clothes, I would have mysteriously run out of fresh clothes to give him. *g* And yeah, I hear you about the stalk of hay and the lips. It was very fun to watch.

Hope your head feels better soon, you poor thing!

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Date: 2006-01-16 06:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] drlense.livejournal.com
Yay for fic! Fic I enjoyed! Epiphany fic!! Hurray...

Date: 2006-01-16 06:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::giggles::

Glad you liked!

Date: 2006-01-16 06:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com
Fic! You wrote me fic! /squeezes you really, really tight/

This makes me feel so much better, thank you.

I loved seeing how Rodney would look to Teer, insisting that he could already do amazing things with his mind. I know John was standing there nodding in agreement, thinking about all the amazing things Rodney thinks up for them to do to one another.

Rodney smiling sweetly at John and then Teer settling in to watch made me smile. I think you managed to write a version of Teer I actually like. Thank you!!

Date: 2006-01-16 07:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::squeezes you back:: I'm glad you liked it! It was intended to be pornier, but I got to thinking about how Rodney react to being in that sanctuary...he'd definitely be a fish out of water. *g*

I know John was standing there nodding in agreement

With a big dorky grin on his face. Yup. And maybe a stalk of hay between his lips.

I think you managed to write a version of Teer I actually like.

LOL, she was irritating in the ep, wasn't she? She couldn't comprehend that John belonged elsewhere. I think Rodney definitely needed to be there to point that out to her. *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 06:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eliade.livejournal.com
Guhhhhhhhh...*meep*. Yes. Yes. Yesyesyes. That is how it should have been.

Then John shuddered violently, open mouth pressed against McKay's skin to muffle his cries.

John relaxed at last, releasing his hold on McKay and rolling back against the pillows, eyes heavy-lidded and sleepy. McKay followed with gentle kisses, rubbing his nose into John's beard. John laughed, and McKay smiled at him with a sweetness Teer would not have thought him capable of.


So happy-making, I glow. *glow*

So, as she watched John lift his legs onto McKay's shoulders, sliding down on the pillows and tucking his backside into McKay's lap, she settled in and made herself comfortable for continued enlightenment.

I glow with *glee*. *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 07:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::watches you glow::

Cool! You're just like a ZPM!

Makes me feel glowy inside. Thank you!



Date: 2006-01-16 06:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] miera-c.livejournal.com
Teer still creeps me out, even here. *shudder*

Somehow I think John would've been so much happier being trapped for six months with Rodney. *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 07:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh, absolutely. I wish Rodney had been there with him. Although watching him do the rescue thing was quite wonderful, too.

Teer was definitely creepy.

Date: 2006-01-16 06:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bluster.livejournal.com
(I can already do amazing things with my mind, thank you very much),

That is so very Rodney. I can just hear him say it with a sneer and a touch of condescension in his voice.

I definitely like your version of the episode better. Thank you for sharing!

Date: 2006-01-16 07:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Oh, you're very welcome!

I'm thinking this whole ascension thing would not appeal to Rodney at all. *g*

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Date: 2006-01-16 06:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kalikahuntress.livejournal.com
Thx for the fic, this is a lovely and much needed distraction seeing as my stupid computer is messed up and won't let me finish my project. Im still creeped out by Teer but thinking about enlightment has certainly put a smile on my face:)

Date: 2006-01-16 10:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
I think we all need to be enlightened. Really.

And I'm sorry for your computer woes. Hope it get unmessed soon!

Date: 2006-01-16 06:51 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] magickaldreamer.livejournal.com
I'm up for that kind of enlightenment!

Date: 2006-01-16 10:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Hell yeah! *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 07:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brandinsbabe.livejournal.com
enlightenment hehe! i love it!
this is definitly how it should have been ;)

Date: 2006-01-16 10:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
I know, I can't believe the writers totally missed the boat on this one.

Silly men.

Date: 2006-01-16 07:06 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] saba1789.livejournal.com
Hm, somehow I like your version better - don't know why. *g* Thanks for writing and sharing this :-) .

Date: 2006-01-17 04:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
You're very welcome! *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 07:22 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com
Yeah, definitely the way it should have gone. :D

Date: 2006-01-17 04:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
I don't know why they didn't film this version of it, really. It would have been much more entertaining. *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 07:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] trinityofone.livejournal.com
Murgh.

And with these new mind-altering drugs that I've just invented, I can erase the 'Epiphany' that aired from my brain and remember this instead!

*does*

Wow, SGA is a really good show!

Date: 2006-01-17 04:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
*g* That's the way to do it! Gimme some of those drugs, too!

Date: 2006-01-16 07:51 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] aizjanika.livejournal.com
This was both perfect and hilariously funny. Oh how I would have loved to have seen the look on her face in that last scene. :-)

Date: 2006-01-17 04:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Aw, thank you. And yeah, I agree, seeing Teer shook up by the nakedness would have been fun. She irked me.

Date: 2006-01-16 08:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] not-sally.livejournal.com
Definitely would have like this better than the ep.

Date: 2006-01-17 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
*g* Oh yeah.

Date: 2006-01-16 08:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eisakay.livejournal.com
Then she looked back. Just to make sure she had seen properly the first time.

I loved this story and, oh man, that line right there made me laugh for a good minute.

Date: 2006-01-17 04:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
LOL, thank you! She's just being very thorough. I know I would be.

Date: 2006-01-16 08:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xanphibian.livejournal.com
*gasps with laughter* Oh, yesyesyes. Thank you for this.

Date: 2006-01-17 05:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
You're very welcome. *g* I figured the ep needed a little correction here and there.

Date: 2006-01-16 08:10 pm (UTC)
cedara: (SGA:Cadman_knows_McShep)
From: [personal profile] cedara
Oh, yeah. This is exactly how it should have been.

Date: 2006-01-17 05:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
::nods::

You know, I don't know why they bothered filming that other version.

Date: 2006-01-16 08:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] randommagic.livejournal.com
I like your version better, especially the take on enlightenment. *g*

Date: 2006-01-17 05:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Slashers are *very* enlightened. We could all ascend at any minute! *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 09:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_inbetween_/
*grin* she came around to the new sort of enlightenment pretty quickly well, who wouldn't in that situation, mmmmh *sigh*

Date: 2006-01-17 05:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Maybe all girls are slashers at heart. *g*

Date: 2006-01-16 09:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reginabellatrix.livejournal.com
Enlightenment, so that's what they're calling it these days, eh?

I definitely would have liked to have seen Rodney dealing with being stuck there with John. Good thing you're here to write it and share your vision with the rest of us. Many thanks for that. :)

Date: 2006-01-17 05:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
You're very welcome! I'm pretty sure this was the way the ep was *supposed* to be.

Date: 2006-01-16 09:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] clarkangel.livejournal.com
And this is SO the HBO version of Epiphany. Loved it. My only complaint....it ends too soon. More please? I want to be enlightened right along with Teer. ::nods::

Date: 2006-01-17 05:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
Hee! Maybe more like the "Cinemax at night" version of it. Glad you liked!

Date: 2006-01-16 09:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] crysothemis.livejournal.com
Hee! Now that's the kind of enlightenment I could get into . . .

You've almost managed to make me like Teer, and that's quite an accomplishment.

Date: 2006-01-17 05:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thegrrrl2002.livejournal.com
She was rather irksome, wasn't she? It made writing this a little bit difficult. But I figured in the end, she was able to appreciate the prettiness.
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